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I leave chrysanthemums
scattered at your feet on tile floor
like the pencil shavings piled
on your desk.

"The flower of death,"
you murmur;
with Rorschach roses on your knuckles
and the hint of a warrior
in the line of your lips,
you sketch bears with open jaws
and black-shadow eyes
in the margins of your math book
with permanent ink.

The hooded abyss of your gaze
masks everything
you can't bring yourself to say:

Love is short
and prone to fading.

It's a good thing I don't mind breathing life
into negative spaces.
:iconglory-be-project:

Sooooo the wonderfully amazing chromeantennae lent me some gorgeous lines and I plucked and twisted them into....well, this.

August 13th, 2014
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:iconhaphazardmelody:
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Your imagery is basically my favorite thing.
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Undomiel321 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"Rorschach roses" is my favorite image. Love it!
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! It's one of my favorites, as well!
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Undomiel321 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:D (Big Grin) 
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AutumnsTea Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think the last two lines are my favorite and the comparison of the flowers to pencil shavings on a desk is wonderful too. :)
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much!
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:iconautumnstea:
AutumnsTea Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :)
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
A neat poem, Beth.  

It's a good thing I don't mind breathing life
into negative spaces.

Fun and well, kinda anti-haunting.  Very nicely done.  :)
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, hon.  I rather like how this one turned out.
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kira997 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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:icontristancody:
TristanCody Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
"you sketch bears with open jaws
and black-shadow eyes
in the margins of your math book" 

:cries: 

Just wonderful, Twilight. Wonderful. 
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, hon! :iconheartglompplz:
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:icontristancody:
TristanCody Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2014  Student Writer
My pleasure. :hug:
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"and the hint of a warrior
in the line of your lips,"

Striking! :)
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, Ron! :heart:
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Espherio Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2014  Student General Artist
Wow. Just. Wow. 

This is so, so very beautiful. Breathtaking work. 
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! I really appreciate the kind words! :heart:
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:iconcopper9lives:
copper9lives Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The last lines KILL me. So breathlessly beautiful.
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconheartglompplz: Thank you!
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:iconcopper9lives:
copper9lives Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:worship:
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SpriteBlayde Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love love love what you did with this. :) The descriptions really bring the emotion into the piece.
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank yooooooou! I really like how this one turned out. :heart:
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SpriteBlayde Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course! And it's really good. :D
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RestrictedA Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014
Love lasts if it's really true. Love falls if it's only for you.

You did great!
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:huggle: Thank you!
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RestrictedA Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014
You're welcome! ^^
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shep4life Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's a good thing I don't mind breathing life
into negative spaces.

Wow
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart: Thanks!
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:iconshep4life:
shep4life Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Most welcome!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love: :heart:
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconloveyouplz:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconilyhugplz:
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