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Autumn's diary
dances in the breeze--
pages ripped from barren branches.

My father's father's blood
was the same color, once--
an angry, untamed flame.

My own blood is an oil-spill
chasing the metal of my joints--
each move creaks.
:iconglory-be-project: Day HAPPY ALMOST 13th BIRTHDAY DA!

:iconmulthaiku:--A string of scifaiku just for you! >.>

The ABSOLUTELY wonderful `FuzzyHoser took me up on my Project Crazy Wonderful and commissioned me to listen to this song ( www.youtube.com/watch?v=-9Ofyx… ) and write something inspired by it. THIS is what happened.

I hope she likes it!

August 6th, 2013
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InvaderRosIrken Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is well written. Although, I'm a bit confused on what the poem is trying to make me feel. Maybe if you included more about a certain situation it would help the reader to  realate and understand the poem more. I don't know if I'm just missing the point, or of I'm just not thinking deep enough, but I really don't understand it. ^^; you have great writing skills though, and you're great at writing poems. 
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. This was actually written for a commission/prompt--the song linked in the artists' comments was what she wanted me to listen to and write as inspired, which is why this might be a little difficult to understand.  Also, scifaiku (science fiction haiku) is meant to be a bit vague or leaves readers thinking--but I'll consider your confusion and keep it in mind for revisions. :heart:
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InvaderRosIrken Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. So, it's kind of a "leave it up to your interpretation" type poems that male you think. :heart: you are very talented 
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, that's it exactly! 

:blush: Thank you.
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InvaderRosIrken Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're most welcome.
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
absolutely strikingggg.
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"My own blood is an oil-spill
chasing the metal of my joints"

Fantastic.
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconheartglompplz: Thank you!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing job, Beth. <3
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oooh...I love the angle ya took with it. :clap:
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, good! :squee: Thank you for participating! :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well yeah! Totally my pleasure to push my demands on you. :D
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle:
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LadyNeytiri Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Student General Artist
:O I :heart: this! I can't wait to see what you do for me :squee:
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank yooooou!
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LadyNeytiri Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Student General Artist
:tighthug: Noooo problem :D
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle:

Speaking of which.... Is there anything I NEED to know about the character(s) you want me to do a piece with?
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LadyNeytiri Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Student General Artist
I'm going to pardon myself now before I make any huge spelling mistakes
and say sorry to how long this will probably turn out and say it again if it's confusing
because I'm massively sleep deprived.


Hmm well the two main characters are Lin & Lleuyaven (aka Aven). Aven is a extremely powerful
elf princess (that sounds so tacky when put that way...uuhhggg *puts head through a wall and continues*)
and is unsure of Lin whom she eventually joins forces with because of secrets that are withheld on both sides
and the Gifted Star that- with time- binds them together. Her star covers her heart while his is at the tip of a long scar that runs from his left shoulder to his right- this marks their weaknesses
but whether it has something to do with the outside or the inside is known only to them.
She ran from her tribe to escape the Shiqon (demons) and their pets the Shiqovre (hellhounds), the last of which is along the lines of a fire controlling beast, both have hunted her
for much of her life. She is strong willed and becomes one of the most powerful elves. Her left eye is dark blue her right emerald green and she has long raven black hair that has a bit of
a wave to it.  Lin is more of a secretive elf who was adopted by the leaders of a different tribe when he was but a baby yet this is unknown to him as he doesn't know much of his past.
But he is the one who was used to kill Aven's elder sister (his body controlled by another) even though he had loved her. This he finds out when he is sent to assassinate her but doesn't succeed
and chooses instead to join forces with her. His right eye is ice blue the left silver.

Ha! That wasn't as long as I expected though I bet I missed something. This all sounds so very horrible and I'm sorry if I sound so pathetic as I am so very tired. *goes to hide in a corner* And if you'd prefer you can always go with the suggestion about my short story
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Student Writer
EeEeEEeeEEE Love it.
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconheartglompplz: Thanks hon!
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome! :heart:
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