The ABSOLUTELY wonderful `FuzzyHoser took me up on my Project Crazy Wonderful and commissioned me to listen to this song ( www.youtube.com/watch?v=-9Ofyx… ) and write something inspired by it. THIS is what happened.
This is well written. Although, I'm a bit confused on what the poem is trying to make me feel. Maybe if you included more about a certain situation it would help the reader to realate and understand the poem more. I don't know if I'm just missing the point, or of I'm just not thinking deep enough, but I really don't understand it. you have great writing skills though, and you're great at writing poems.
Thank you. This was actually written for a commission/prompt--the song linked in the artists' comments was what she wanted me to listen to and write as inspired, which is why this might be a little difficult to understand. Also, scifaiku (science fiction haiku) is meant to be a bit vague or leaves readers thinking--but I'll consider your confusion and keep it in mind for revisions.