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Twelve months ago, we swapped rumors about
the hottest bad boys; counted the number of freckles Tanya,
the Queen Bee of Beverly High, didn't cover with  her polka-dot skirt;
and discovered our favorite song on a blog we both wished
we owned.  "What do you think we'll be doing this time next year?"
I asked over peanut butter cookies from a bag
and a commercial break between late night movies.  
You giggled, pondering, and said, "Hanging out in our dorm room.
You'll be snuggled up to the flavor of the month--
a basketball player, no doubt, or a starving artist--
and I'll be green with jealousy, like always."  
When Dirty Dancing came back on, we rocked along,
shag carpet burning streaks across bare feet.

This morning, listening to my roommate sing with the radio--
some country ballad you'd never approve of--
I remember your laugh and the dark, curling fingers of hair
at the nape of your neck as you shimmied out my bedroom window
at almost three AM.  I'm thinking about dreams--
yours and mine, of college and big cities and breaking into our own--
and plaiting black feathers through my braid, wondering if you realized
how much you were risking, how much you were leaving behind
...and how much I'd miss you still.
:iconglory-be-project:

:iconnapowrimo: -- Day 22

I... don't even know where this came from. :shrug:

BUT this is for BlueiceAlice, who (a LONG time ago) requested I write a poem about "feathers and peanut butter cookies."  I am so sorry for the delay!

April 22nd, 2014
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It can be hard to pull of internal monologue. I like this a lot. :)
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner May 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :heart: I'm glad it works for this piece.
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xXI-Feel-InfiniteXx Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think this is a really poignant piece for a lot of people - particularly those heading off to uni. I especially like the part about how many freckles Tanya didn't cover up, it's an interesting way to phrase it and conveys the idea of wearing something revealing but remains an unusual image. (I hope that makes sense, I found that hard to phrase right!)
Basically, your descriptions here are really interesting - which made me really read each line because nothing was too typical and I hadn't seen the phrases before. :love:
Also I don't know if you intended it but I thought when she was braiding her hair at the end it seemed quite sad - like their futures were once intertwined together but now she was on her own...I don't know, but that line probably hit me the most :) :heart:
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My goodness, thank you for such a well-thought out and wonderful comment! I really appreciate your kind words, and am SO glad that this touched you so deeply.

And YES--that's what I was going for exactly with the braid. :iconheartglompplz: Thank you for reading--I hope you have a great day!
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xXI-Feel-InfiniteXx Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
And thank you for writing your lovely poem in the first place! :heart:
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
one of your best pieces. ever. please write more like this. lovelovelovelovelove
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, honey! I've been branching out a bit more with my writing lately, so I'm sure more like this will spring up! :heart:
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
She ran away? How sad.
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:nod: Yes, sad indeed! Thank you for reading, honey. :heart:
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really liked it. :) Thanks for writing!
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