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I want to tell her the things
I'll tell her when she’s older,
but the information terrifies her.

In order of importance:
she has luna moths in her head,
monarch butterflies in her stomach,
and a feral fetus in her womb.

Her hands
are collapse-clasped and folded
in her lap;
she holds her elbows like wings
away from her ribs,
ready to flap,
to flutter,
to fly.

I want to tell her
to keep one hand in her purse
so she can always find her keys,
to keep an eye on the door
and the door always open
so she can run if she doesn't feel safe,
but her cheeks are rorschach-splotch red
and the tension in her shoulders
warns me she's not ready
to hear this.

And there is the possibility that
maybe I’m not ready to tell
this fourteen-year-old
now woman,

I’m just as devastated as her;
that she is surrounded by friends and family
who are violated by a community
where no man can say yes all men.
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:iconeqlrytes:
eqlrytes Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2014
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... a simply gorgeous, well-written piece you and Nichrysalis have created. The imagery and moments of throught-provoking tenderness.... I loved it, dear. A job well done. :clap:
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconheartglompplz: Thank you, sweetheart. 
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:iconofonesoul:
OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome, my love! :iconsupertighthugplz:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014   General Artist
ALL THE FEELS AGFSHGSHGFA :heart: :heart: :heart:
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconheartglompplz:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2014   General Artist
:iconheartglompplz:
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StormBringer23 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014
Yeah, I've read, and reread, unsure of how to appreciate it. Though I do, I can't say why.

Because I just can't.

I grew up with a borrowed Mother, who always warned us, last thing out the door; If in doubt, run. I'm still here because of her.

Thanks you two.
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
And thank you.  That sounds like very good advice. :huggle:
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014   Writer
Beautiful. :heart:
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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:iconintroverted-ghost:
introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014   Writer
My pleasure!
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:iconcamelopardalisinblue:
camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Perfect, both of you.
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart: Thank you.
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart:
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014   Writer
Well.  You guys just made me cry.

This is beautifully written.  Every time you approach a touchy subject like this, you handle it so gracefully.  It's raw, and it hurts, and it's deeply personal but universal.  You both did an amazing job with this piece.  I'm feeling extremely uncomfortable now and remembering exactly how I felt when I found out my friend was raped a little over two years ago.
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart: Thank you for the feedback, honey.  We wanted this to be tactful while still retaining the message, so we're glad that's how it came across. I am sorry it made you uncomfortable....but that's also what we were aiming for. :huggle:
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014   Writer
It needed to be uncomfortable.  That's just the nature of the subject.  If it had been comfortable, I think that would be much, much more disturbing.  :hug:
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:nod: Yes, I agree.
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Appropriately uncomfortable and beautifully written!
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, honey, from myself and Nichrysalis! :heart:
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Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
beautiful. i wish i could explain how much i love this but it's 1 am and if i had a circuit it'd be short-circuiting. that doesn't make any sense. 
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!

If you haven't already done so, make sure to go show Nichrysalis's version of this piece some love, as well, since he contributed half of this. :heart:
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:iconwaffles-of-gondolyn:
Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
no problem love ! 

i certainly have ! you guys are great together ! 
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome--and thank you again! :heart:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not really sure what to say here. This is amazingly done. This hits really close to home for me, so maybe that's why I don't know exactly how to express a reaction. :heart:
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconheartglompplz: :huggle: I know what you mean, sweetie--no worries, I understand. Thank you for the comment, though! Nic and I really appreciate it.
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
There are some really amazing lines in this and you both did really well considering the subject matter
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, sweetheart! We really appreciate the feedback, and we're both so very pleased to hear we handled this subject tactfully. :heart:
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Not a problem! You are an amazing writer and so is he...quite impressed
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
Amazing -- great work, both of you. :heart:
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, honey. :iconheartglompplz:
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SpriteBlayde Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I think this was a very tactful way to address a topic that many tend to shy away from.

You and Nichrysalis did an excellent job of portraying such a subject. I love how your styles meshed and how you both kept it vague yet descriptive at the same time, if that makes sense. Excellent work!
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, Kelsy!  It does make sense, yes--and that's exactly what we were going for. We wanted it to be tactful. :heart:
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SpriteBlayde Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're most welcome! :heart:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
...I'm getting the impression this is about sexual predators or misconduct.
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:nod: Nichrysalis's post of this explains better in the comments, but yes, we wanted to talk about rape culture.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
His description was somewhat vague, to be honest. But combined with your comments, it made more sense.
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:huggle:
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
 Wow, powerful, throat-lump-inducing, and moving. And, sadly for me, relatable to a certain point. You're right, it's something that deserves more attention and consideration than it gets.
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, honey. :heart:
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful imagery, very very well done :D
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:icontwilightpoetess:
TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart: :huggle:
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Was that meant for TwilightPoetess? ;)
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oops! yes, thank you for tagging her :D
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