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monday.

12:03 a.m.


    the moon is yellow and this bed, too big for me. reminds me of you. reminded of you, i lie awake, lungs cold, but my eyes have gone dry. dead, drying tearstains on satin-white pillow sheets are all i have left now. you left me behind, but i refuse to forget. the moon is yellow...
      and so were your eyes.
Hm.

For Book Arts, we are starting a Haiku section. I decided to play around with Haiku and make a couple of interlacing poems using ONLY Haiku+one line at the very end that feels out of place. Not natural.

I'm not sure how these are going to work...what do you all think of my first attempt?

Should I continue?

January 2010

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If you enjoy Haiku, you should check out:

Now That You're Home x3

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Solaces Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2010
You're so talented. I'm so jealous. =P
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
awww...*blush* thanks so much, but there's really nothing to be jealous of. I just work at it a LOT. Anyone could do what I do, really.
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wakiagaru Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2010
oooh~ how wonderful. First of all, thanks a ton for linking me =) and second, I love how you tie the last line of one with the first of the other. I was going to do that for my haiku piece, but I decided to do last word only. Maybe I'll try one this way. =D
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks for such a great comment! I think yours worked much better than mine, but I'm glad you like it regardless. And yeah...it's practice for my class. we are working in groups to make Haiku, so I figured I should give it a try first before the real thing. ^.^
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wakiagaru Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2010
Well, I love yours =D
I'd love to see more haikus from you!
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
haha, well I've finished several, about to post another...soo...check out my gallery for them if you'd like!
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wakiagaru Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2010
will do! I've also linked this back to my own piece so people come see your work too =)
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww, thanks! I really appreciate that. ^.^
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